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SandSan on November 29th, 2011, 11:21 pm
Okay, I'm going to be honest.
I love the comic and everything, but sometimes it is hard to follow. First, I had the impression that Raine already was quiet because he seems pretty reclusive, so what's the difference between then and now.
The chronology is a little confusing. Because during the last night they seemed to get along alright, unless this is related to the dinner incident. I still wanna here about the flashback, June being expelled, and the medical bill that was ripped up.
I'm sorry to be needy, but it seems like there a bunch of plot points that are open that don't seem to be connecting.
NonameXP on November 29th, 2011, 11:27 pm
e_e I'm pretty much lost. Raine has me lost that is. I'm just not getting it, but that's just me.
Yozora-No-Ame on November 30th, 2011, 12:10 am
One Halfed has been absolutely lovely so far! I love it and I am incredibly eager to read the next pages and chapters..!
I can't wait to see how things develop!!
2die on November 30th, 2011, 12:22 am
@SandSan: I'm sorry that the comic is extremely confusing, it's just how my thoughts like to arrange the plot. It IS all intertwined because when it's over, everything just come crashing down all at once.
The dinner incident already passed.
June just gave his brother seafood when he shouldn't have.
Not to worry, I have an explanation for everything, I'm just not a very good storyteller.
Lazy-lil-ninja on November 30th, 2011, 7:46 am
like any good comic; one must wait. if someone tells you everything in the begining, it's boring.
kuroi_hitsuji on November 30th, 2011, 9:01 am
@SandSan: I think we can basically assume this has something to do with the person who was eyeing June while Raine wrote notes.
Also, I find it slightly hard to follow but generally easy.
The flashback scenes only seem to be the "Finding Raine in the Rain" scene, the "Hospital" scene and...something seems to ring a bell, a third flashback, maybe but I don't remember. o_o;
Anyway, as a suggestion to 2Die-san, maybe for the more speedy readers it would be more easy to tell which is the past and which is the present by changing the shape of speech bubbles or lightening everything to grey or something.
Just an idea, I don't wanna disrupt the style. :P
2die on November 30th, 2011, 9:35 am
@kuroi_hitsuji: Things with black borders are flashbacks. Besides that, everything else is chronological.
Obnoxious-Jerk on November 30th, 2011, 10:56 am
Oookay. I just re-read the whole thing yesterday, and now that I got an account (hurrah) I can finally comment your comic! Sorry for any english mistakes, hn.\o/
First, I love your art. I don't know why buuuut it's really cool. Really. As for the plot, I don't think things are this confusing. I mean, the flashbacks are quite easy to tell from the rest of the story... I mean, I had no problem with that. Well, that's just my opinion.
Hope you keep on with this comic anyway! Cause that's easily my favorite on SJ~♫
mcarris94 on November 30th, 2011, 3:02 pm
Honestly I have no problem with the the way the storytelling is, and I think it's pretty easy to tell when the flashbacks are... I'm not seeing the problem here... So keep up the good work!! I love this comic and can't wait to see what happens!!! <3
eiko-chan (Guest) on November 30th, 2011, 3:57 pm
I started reading like, yesterday. And I must say nothing is complicated, everything is easy to follow (only mysterious). The only complicated thing is to distinguish Raine and June, but only at the first pages.
You draw beautifully, and I'm very curious to see how you're going to develop the comic - so keep up with the good work ;)
Ambrose on December 3rd, 2011, 2:27 am
I don't know, everything's been making sense to me. I like how your lines flow, your art is really gestural in a really beautiful way! And you're just starting, haha, more or less. I guess I can understand why people are confused but I personally am not.
I'm interested in this comic. It looks fantastic.
kuroi_hitsuji on December 3rd, 2011, 12:36 pm
way to go me for noticing.
Maybe it was a subconscious noticing thats why I could tell? O_o